Talk:Gallataur (5e Race)
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Hey there, I have made changes to the race as requested, I hope that these changes are sufficient to work within the race parameters. My only request is that they stay large in size, this is because they are the same height and weight as a horse and I would prefer them to stay that way. Aside form that, if there are any ways in which I can improve this race, please let me know.
I'm so glad you contacted me through this talk page! I completely understand your requests, as flavor-wise this race wouldn't make sense if they were Medium. However, creating a Large race comes with a lot of responsibility, and even making more than one beneficial trait can be problematic. I do see that you've taken steps to balance things out in terms of racial traits, which is great! One thing I would like to see change is the Natural Weapon section. There are currently two of them and both of them deal an amount of damage that is definitely unacceptable for an unarmed strike. Add the Trample trait on top of it and your Gallataur is a 1st Level Monk on top of whatever class they choose. I would probably choose one of the unarmed strikes to keep, bring its damage down to one die, and remove the Trample trait entirely. Also, gaining advantage on skill checks is not okay on a racial trait either, so I made some changes to the Plains subrace. Thanks for contacting me, and keep up the good work! :)
Hello again, I have made some edits both the the racial traits and to the grammar of my "lore", I hope these changes are sufficient.
Ive tried improving on the grammar, but I need help. I cant find any more obvious issues, it must just be the way I write that are causing the issues. If anyone could give me a hand maybe send me an edited copy or something, that would be very much appreciated.
Don’t worry! I’m currently in the process of going through the entire page to proofread! I think the way that you write may be similar to the way that you speak, which would explain the abundance of commas. Commas naturally act as a pause in speaking, so reading your text out loud might change the way that you structure your sentences. That’s a great way to write, but it may affect grammar, so I’m just gonna go through and fix the grammar while retaining your flavorful writing. You’re doing great! Keep up the good work! :)
Thanks for giving the page a bit of editing. I'll have to get better at my sentence structures. Just let me know if there's anything else I can do before the race goes to compeleted.
I've reworded and reworked the lore on this page. The flavor text still brings the same message, but I feel a lot of the issues with grammar have been fixed. Please tell me if there's something I'm missing.